I love how experimental you went on this song, i think the song shines mostly for the idea behind it than the song itself.
I love the intro, very atmospheric and SkyeLike, things sound really awesome and floaty.
The bassline is really great and possibly takes the cake on what captures my attention.
Like BFP said the stick does sound a bit in your face, maybe making it a bit lighter in volume or even changing the instrument itself would be appropriate.
The drums are really well made and have a lot of effort into them and with the exception of the stick sound the percussion is really awesome.
The vocal melody and lyrics are pretty good, the vocals in themselves are quite decent it is obvious that you are not a bad singer and just need a little practice to better yourself.
The word winter is out of tune and the "Voice of Mind" section has some other parts that are not quite in the spot, the problem is not in the voice, you have quite an enjoyable one its in the pitch control, also the vocal part is really high maybe you should have started with a lower tone for your first vocal attempt?
I love your voice and the pitch is spot on in "Cannot hear her cries".
The ending i would imagine it a little different, with a little more conclusion just after you end the "Cannot hear her cries" sentence.
Overall i love the bassline, the percussion, the melody and the overall atmosphere. The vocals had some flaws and the ending doesn't feel very right to me.
I like the song but i think you have a lot more in your box to give us, i hope you do get to the next round and slap us all in the face with another awesome song like "Astral Nation"!
Great Job Skye!